Diary entry

                                                                                    30 November 2012

Dear diary,

Today was the worse day ever! I hate it here because I am so lonely and miserable. It all started when I received an amazing letter from my mum, who is loving and caring.  When I read the letter that was from my mum I felt tearful.

Suddenly it got worse! I was in the small tiny boot room that was dirty and basher came running aggressive towards me. He pind me against the wall and put black, scruffy shoe polish in my hair.

Later that day I was my own business when mean Mr Carter came towards me and shouted at me. He grabbed a hard book and put it on my head and told me to stand it the corner. That was it I was running away.

From Bertie

By Kian Evans


One thought on “Diary entry

  1. Miss Smith

    Well done Kian, you have included expanded noun phrases and organised your writing into paragraphs. Next we will look at including commas to clarify meaning in our writing.
    Miss Smith:)



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